I EVALUATED LAUREN'S CHARACTER BLOG: simonthewitness.blogspot.co.uk
1. What do you think is the strongest part of the blog? This could be a certain post, the writing style, the graphic design, the use of alternative media, the images, etc. What makes this element so strong?
I think the strongest part of Lauren's character blog is the first post she made where Simon gave an eye-witness statement of when he saw his mother die and witnessed Joseph take Alex. He expressed his point of view on the event in the church and his feelings on all of it. Lauren portrayed Simon to be very angry and emotional about what happened that day which gives the impression to us as readers that Simon has a very strong hate against Joseph for separating him and his sister. For example, a quote from her blog to prove this is " What sick person does this?! Making a tragedy into 'Art'. Such a sick minded man. I HATE HIM! ". To add to the effect of this strong blog post, Lauren added a picture of the church that contained the dead corpses. This creates more of a powerful effect to her post because we can get more of an idea of how it looked like that day when Simon was separated from Alex.
2. Is there a part of the blog you find confusing? A part that doesn’t seem to quite match the rest or the character for which it was designed? A link for which you don’t understand the connection? Can you give some suggestions for how to improve that part?
A part of the blog that I find confusing is when Lauren talks about Simon's interest in music. The majority of that post I understand. However, there is a part that confuses me: " I believe hip hop is the best genre of music! I LOVE it! Lil Wayne, 50 cent and Céline Dion have to be my favourite artists out of them all! " I know already that Simon likes hip hop when he has a discussion with Alex about music but I don't remember him mentioning Celine Dion who definitely isn't apart of the hip hop genre.
To improve that particular part, I think she shouldn't mention Celine Dion within the hip hop genre. Instead, she should mention it separately. I don't remember hearing Simon mention Celine Dion within the play either. All I remember is him liking hip hop, not Celine Dion's type of music. However, I could be wrong as I am not Simon.
3. After reading the blog, what would you like to know more about? Is there a post that leaves you with questions? Write down at least two questions to help your partner further develop this blog.
1. Because of Joseph's rude behaviour suggesting that there is intimacy between you and your sister, does that make you want to leave? Why?
2. Would you like to have a better relationship with Joseph? Why?
4. Did you notice any major misspellings or grammatical issues? Please note down anything.
1st Blog Post: " This is the church where we watched my mother died. " - *die
"Then straight away, joseph..." - *Joseph
2nd Blog Post: "Its" x3 - *it's
3rd Blog Post: "cant" x3 - *can't
" todays" - *today's
" Im " x2 - *I'm
4th Blog Post: "alex" - *Alex
"cant" - *can't
" I feel so sorry for Alex, " - *Alex.
5. Did your partner fulfil all the requirements on the Character Blog Requirements handout? If not, which one or ones still need to be added?
- A photo of you in your costume
- A link to a video or an embedded video
- An addition set of research links grouped around a theme
- A photo slideshow